Shelby and the Other-Brothers ....

Ainsley, age 4, (to John Mark):  "You're not my brother!
I don't have to mind you!"

Shelby, age 9: "Yes, you do, same as me.  Mind Randy,
too.  From now on, they're your other brothers." 

This is a scaled-down version of the cover flat recently uploaded for publication.  This file and the interior file meet publication specification.  All that remains is to order a proof copy and then ... 3, 2, 1 launch! 
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Cover blurb:

Shelby, Randy, and John Mark have been best friends since grade school.  Growing up in a small town in south Georgia, they've petted and spoiled Shelby's little sister, Ainsley, hunted and fished, played football, studied, worked and worshipped -- together. The sons of close-knit families, they have been raised to be responsible, to revere God, and to love.

But as seniors in high school, they are accused of unspeakable crimes.  Branded criminals in headlines from coast to coast, persecuted by the justice system, abandoned by their community, their lives shattered and
their futures jeopardized, they have no one to turn but their families, their faith and each other.

Sweet Southern Boys -- a tale of misandry run amok.

I've been interviewed...


...at Readers' Realm, a great new blog that brings readers and indie authors together.  It's has recently gone online and already looks like a great resource for both readers and writers.  Check it out!

Facebook images for Southern Man

All those cute, funny or inspirational images you see on Facebook inspired me, so I made some to promote Southern Man.
 On a roll, I made two others with excerpts they illustrate and posted them.  Check them out by following the links below the images:


 

I'm looking foreward to doing some more of these!

Tell Us About Your Southern Man!

Rated R -- for Readers

My novel, Southern Man, is about a sweet Alabama woman, Patty, who loves her Tennessee man, Troy, with all her heart. She loves his "all-American body and movie-star face," but her devotion goes far beyond his physical appearance.

She loves how he faces down his weaknesses, overcomes them and is a stronger and better man for it.  She loves his strength, his smarts, his self-confidence, and his sense of responsibility to her and their children, to his company and his community and, ultimately, his God. He is his family's protector and provider, as he and Patty believe God intended him to be -- and he's as devoted to his children, in his own masculine way, as Patty is.
Late Wednesday afternoon there was a rally at Verona State in support of Shearwater-Ingram’s "anonymous sexual harassment victim." Sponsored by the Women's Assistance Group and held on The Commons, it was a small gathering, no more than twenty people, but nevertheless a vocal, loud and angry event.

It had been hastily organized at noon, and the Stevensons didn't find out until someone at church told them. They saw the probable fallout from it as soon as they got home.

Troy had steered the station wagon into the garage and the family had emerged just as several cars rolled down Live Oak Street, slowing dramatically as they reached the red brick rambler. Slurs shouted in both male and female voices echoed through the night—Patty easily made out "Sick bastard!" and "Sex predator!"—and she looked at her husband in alarm."Take them and get in the house," he ordered, walking toward the driveway.

"Where're you going?" she said shrilly.

In the faint orange glow of the street lamp, he turned a face like thunder toward her and barked, "I'm gonna shut the g’rage door, now do what I tell ye, git’n the house!"

Patty herded the children indoors. Two steps into the kitchen, she heard the rumble of the garage door closing followed by several loud, sharp pops that cracked the night and tore into her soul. Terror such as she’d never known ripped through her and she screamed, "TROEEEE!"

She streaked back into the now darkened garage. By the light of the kitchen slanting into the shadows, she saw him walking to her.

"Oh!" She ran to him and slammed herself against him, flinging her arms around him, burying her face against him and crying hysterically in great, gulping sobs. "I thought ... you'd been ... shot!"

His arms went around her and held her as tightly as she held him. He was trembling violently, whether from fright or rage, Patty couldn’t tell. Perhaps both.

"Hey, now, I’m all right. Calm down. Bastards threw firecrackers in the driveway." He shushed her and kissed her forehead. "Let's get inside."

The terrified children were huddled together in the kitchen when their parents stepped through the back door. They ran to their father wailing, "Daddy!" and he knelt down to hold them a moment, murmuring words of comfort. "I’m okay. Don’t worry."

He stood, nodded toward the family room and told Patty grimly, "Take them in there and stay with them."

He went through the house turning off lights except the night lights in the kitchen and hallway, then disappeared into the shadows of the hall and emerged moments later carrying a box. He sat on the coffee table, put the box beside him and looked at his children through the dimness.

"You know what's in here?" He tapped the box.

Their heads bobbed and Randy said, "A gun."

"That's right." He gazed at them with such intensity his eyes seemed to burn. "I can’t lock it back up. I’ve got to get to it quick if I need to, so I’ve got to leave it out. Now listen to me. I've never hit either one of you." He focused on Randy and a flash of pain and regret crossed his face. "Not on purpose. But if I ever see you even touch this gun, I will wear you out. Do you understand me? I will wear ... you ... out."

Round-eyed and open-mouthed, they whispered, "Yes, sir."

"I bought your mama a gun, taught her to shoot for self-defense and I'll teach you when the time comes. But right now this is dangerous for you. It could kill you. And if that happened, your mama and I might as well die, too."

In the silence that followed Troy's admonition, the faint sound of a car engine revving up and yelling voices came to them, though they couldn't make out the words.

"Should we call the police?" Inspired by the calm and courage that had settled over Troy after his initial fright, Patty tried hard to control her alarm, but she was still caught in the trauma of terror and it came through in her trembling voice.

"If it don't stop soon, or if any cars pull up in the driveway or people we don't know come up in the yard, we’ll call."

He left them, walked through the darkness to the foyer and flipped light switches beside the intercom. The front porch light came on, along with rarely used corner floodlights that bathed the driveway and front lawn with light. He opened the front door and stood quietly in the shadows of the darkened foyer, scanning the yard and street.

After ten minutes passed with no further disturbances, he closed the door, set the alarm and secured the house for the night.


Is there a Southern man in your life? Use the COMMENTS to tell us a little about him. Thanks!

The MacLachlainn Saga, Book Two, out now!

Rated R -- for Readers

I'm excited! The second volume in The MacLachlainn Saga, Deep In the Valley, is available now as a Kindle e-book. Here's a summary:

Niall MacLachlainn drinks to escape the bitterness borne of resentment toward his father. But instead of providing an escape, a bout of drunkenness ushers a nightmare into Niall’s life...a nightmare of torture at the hands of unscrupulous men who lust for the gold on Cherokee land. And the wounded soul of a boy becomes the scarred shell of a man.

When he finds love with Meli, he hopes to leave his past failures behind. But heartbreak finds Niall again through his infant son.

Can he ever receive forgiveness for his failures? And will his father ever give him the approval he craves?

Set against the backdrop of the tumultuous years of the American Revolution, Deep in the Valley continues the saga of the Ailean MacLachlainn family, whose fortune and future is tied to the fate of the new nation.

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Find Deep In the Valley HERE and visit Tommie Lyn's website HERE.

A bittersweet romance short story just published

Rated R -- for Readers
........................ A Family At Last

Raised together in a group home for orphaned and abandoned children,
Vandi and Nicole's love was inevitable. But their marriage was a casualty
of progressivism -- shattered before it began. Nobody could know their
love was strong enough to last through time, deceit and separation.

............
An electronic short-short story for the Amazon Kindle. Also available at Smashwords in a variety of electronic formats. Flash fiction of only 1,600 words, you can read it in minutes.

Here are the Product Details for A Family At Last:

Format: Kindle Edition
File Size: 17 KB
Price: $0.99
Publisher: Brasstown Books (May 4, 2011)
Sold by: Amazon Digital Services
Language: English
ASIN: B004ZGATWE
Lending: Enabled

Confederate History and Heritage Month

Rated G

The CSA was a bid to form an independent nation out of a region that had a common enemy and some collective regional identity. But the CSA comprised many sub-cultures (a few of them didn't want to be there), and it had a leadership that sometimes confused self-interest with public policy. It had its fair share of charlatans and profiteers and criminal opportunists. It had some brilliant generals and a great many men in uniform who would be the pride of any army in human history. It was committed to 18th century republican values that were incompatible with fighting a modern war, and it had internal social conflicts that the war aggravated.

In nearly all of this it was entirely like the American Revolutionaries. The colonists in 1776: one-third for independence, one-third against, one-third uncommitted. That must be the standard for legitimacy, or else our United States lacks it. The CSA fought a much larger enemy than George III, mostly on its own soil, without a Dutch loan or a French fleet to aid it, and the majority, in spite of internal divisions, put up a herculean effort, won spectacular victories, made shift with what little it had, and held out till the place was literally gutted and blood-drained by its foe.

The four-year history of the CSA is not necessarily the place to seek an example of the values Southerners sought to uphold. Any nation fighting for survival from the cradle, invaded and blockaded all its life, doesn't get a chance to express the finer points of democracy and civil culture. If all we knew of Americans was how they actually behaved from 1776 to 1783, we wouldn't think much of our sense of "democracy" or commitment to "personal freedom."
~ Douglas Harper

Storm Surge Dedication

Rated G
  


To the unsung heroes of emergency management
and disaster preparedness,
the first responders, the volunteers,
those who donate equipment and supplies,
and neighbors who help neighbors,
when disaster strikes.
The world is a better place because of you.




Storm Surge will be released April 15 by Desert Breeze Publishing.  Purchase information will be posted soon.  Meanwhile, visit the novel's page at Desert Breeze by clicking HERE.

Also, to celebrate the release of Storm Surge, the Kindle edition of Southern Man will go on sale for $.99 from now through the end of May. 

The E-book revolution

Rated R -- For Readers

Readers may or may not be as aware as writers are of the great shifting of the tectonic plates of the publishing industry wrought by the digital revolution. But most of you surely aren't unaware of it.

In 2008, alternatively published books (including e-books) outnumbered conventionally published ones, for the first time in history. They were published for you -- readers. You've purchased Kindles and Nooks and Sony Readers by the millions.

My Kindle for PC loading....

Although sales of traditional dead-tree books still outnumber sales of e-books, the balance is gradually tilting. As has been noted many times and places, paper books will never entirely go away. Probably. But readers of the future will read electronic books, magazines and newspapers. 


Southern Man on Kindle for PC
If you're undecided about buying an e-reader (I don't own one, yet --but my sister owns two, a Kindle and a Nook) you can still read e-books on your computer. Many e-publishers offer books for downloading in .pdf format. All that's required is the installation of Adobe's Acrobat Reader.  It's free, and Adobe is wonderful about keeping the software updated with the latest capabilities.

Get Adobe Reader

You Amazon addicts will be happy to discover (if you don't know already) that Kindle emulating software is available for download and installation on your computer. You can purchase Kindle books and download them in seconds.  And many, particularly classics, are free! It's hard to beat free!

Get Kindle for PC software

There's also Kindle software for your iPhone, Blackberry, iPad and Android.

Check it out, and join the digital reading revolution. Happy E-reading!

Screenshot of portion of Kindle for PC showing
Prologue from Southern Man and reader controls

Stuff that's been happening....

Rated G -- For General  Readership

I've resumed my weekly essays about gender issues at the False Rape Society blog. Many thanks to Pierce and Steve for the opportunity to vent my spleen over the excesses of radical feminism. I guess a 120,000- word novel taking rad-fems to task just didn't get it out of my system.

I have a new link in my wavy menu bar at the top of my pages -- Fun Stuff. Have a look. Jigsaw and crossword puzzles, hangman and word search games, all with tie-ins to my novels. And off-site links to more games and puzzles, for more fun.

I continue to work on my writing in progress -- my somewhat-paranormal romance featuring the Southern Sasquatch, aka skunk apes (Google 'em); and the Georgia series. But as I've noted in several blogs and groups and loops and elsewhere, I belong to the P.J. O'Rourke school of writing. My methodology is to procrastinate as long as possible....
"Writing is agony. I hate it. ....When I'm writing, I spend a lot of time thinking, 'My, doesn't the top of the fridge look dirty'. It takes for ever. I like thinking about writing. I like having written. But actually sitting down and doing it ..."
-- P.J. O'Rourke, journalist, writer and political satirist,
to Christopher Bray of the U.K.'s Telegraph, 2005
All you jigsaw puzzle freaks, click the graphic links below to go to the puzzles made from my book covers. Have fun!
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Storm Surge Cover Art

...by the talented and accomplished Jenifer Ranieri. Click HERE to see the cover full size. (Use your browser's back button to return here.)


Justin thanks you, Jenifer! Briana thanks you. And I thank you.  The cover is wonderful!

Storm Surge will be released by Desert Breeze Publishing April 15, 2011, in e-book format. It will be available at the Desert Breeze Bookstore, Amazon.com, Barnes & Noble and various other online outlets. Check back here for links when the book "goes live" in April!

Taglines, Teasers and Blurbs, Oh My!

I've been reading recently how these devices are used for promoting novels, movies, TV shows, even products like beer and insurance. I've participated in great discussions online about excerpts before, and learned a lot, but the other devices are important, too.

Blurbs, of course, are what you'd find on the back cover of a book. This one is from Sharyn McCrumb's The Songcatcher. "Folksinger Lark McCourry is haunted by the memory of a song. Passed down through generations, it carried her ancestors from a Scottish island, through the pages of American history, to western North Carolina. Over the years, though, the memory of the old song has dimmed and Lark's only hope of preserving the legacy lies in the mountain wisewoman Nora Bonesteel, who talks to both the living and the dead."

Taglines are short, punchy, memorable. They don't tell much about the plot or characters. They're more thematic.  Some recognizable samples -- "In space, no one can hear you scream." "Just when you thought it was safe to go back into the water." "Space. The final frontier." "The truth is out there." "You're in good hands with Allstate." "Great taste. Less filling."

Then, there are teasers -- very short (one or two sentence) summaries such as you might find in a TV Guide listing. Here are some examples taken from my Cox TV Guide:

From NCIS: "A murder prompts the reopening of one of Tony's old investigations, leading Gibbs and DiNozzo to reverse roles to solve the case."

From The Fugitive: "A U.S. marshal hunts a doctor on the run who was convicted of murdering his wife."

Househunters (on HGTV): "A former Navy flight instructor searches for a home with character in Savannah, Ga."

The Great Gatsby: "Jazz Age bootlegger learns the hard way about the wages of sin."

The Old Man and the Sea: "An old Cuban fisherman's dry spell is broken."

I've had writers tell me that these devices are more difficult to write than novels themselves, but if it doesn't come to you easily, it's just another one of those skills you'll have to develop. It was years before I developed good taglines, teasers and blurbs for Southern Man, but eventually, I got there. In fact, I managed to come up with several each for use in promoting the novel.

Taglines --

A story of love and betrayal in the sultry South
Chronicles the pernicious fallout of the sexual revolution
Reveals the dark underbelly of radical feminism.
Teasers --
"A family man is targeted with a false sexual harassment accusation by an amoral young woman and her uber-feminist mentor."

"A corporate executive is targeted with a false sexual harassment complaint by an amoral young woman and her uber-feminist mentor with harrowing consequences for himself and his family."
Blurbs --

Short (129 words)
In 1983, in moss-hung Verona, Georgia, the tender and tenacious love between a hardworking man and his adoring wife is tested by sudden adversity.
Corporate executive Troy Stevenson must confront his nasent alcohol abuse or he risks losing the wife, daughter and son he deeply loves. When his latent destructivness impacts his family, he moves to their weekend cottage to come to grips with his personal weaknesses.
Southern Man takes readers from the hills of Appalachia to the University of Alabama during the Paul "Bear" Bryant era; from staid New England to drug-drenched and sex-saturated Haight-Ashbury in the Summer of Love; from the glittering skyline of Atlanta to moss-hung south Georgia -- and reveals what can happen when a good man becomes the object of lust and the target of vengeance.
Long (173 words)
In 1972, they fell in love at first sight. He was a college football star -- good-looking and smart. She was sweet sixteen -- pretty, artless, chaste. A year later, Troy Stevenson and Patty Ayers were married.
But in 1983, in moss-hung Verona, Georgia, as they plan to celebrate their tenth wedding anniversary, the tender and tenacious love between this hardworking man and his adoring wife is tested by sudden adversity.
Now a corporate executive, Troy must confront an old family secret that underlies his nascent alcohol abuse or he may lose his wife and the son and daughter he deeply loves. When his latent destructiveness is unleashed and impacts his family, he moves to their lakeside cottage to come to grips with his personal weaknesses.
But busybodies at his company assume he left home because his marriage is in trouble. Encouraged by the assumption, co-worker Brooke Emerson, an amoral, 1980s material girl romantically obsessed with Troy, attempts to seduce him, setting in motion a chain of events with harrowing consequences for him and his family.
I freely admit these aren't the best examples of taglines, teasers and blurbs, but considering that it hasn't been all that long ago that I was absolutely clueless about all three, I do believe I've made some progress.

And so can you! 

Writers, I'd love for you to leave samples of  your taglines, teasers and blurbs in the comments.

My very own quick and tasty pizza snack recipe!

Snacks for writers ... and others

Visit my HUB PAGE For the low-down on my lo-cal, lo-carb pizza snack recipe!

This snack is great for writers who get the munchies in the middle of the night -- or any time in the middle of a writing session. They take me about 30 seconds to assemble, another thirty seconds in the microwave and -- voila! -- pizza snack in a minute!
The Wasa Crisp 'n Light 7-Grain crackerbread gives a hint of unusual flavor to the old, tried and true tomato sauce + mozzarella combo.

If you try it -- even if you're not a writer -- leave a comment or send me an email and let me know what you think!

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Head-hoppin' and author intrusion -- my way

Or...when rules should be broken

Probably to the horror of writers, editors and other POV purists everywhere, I write in what I call modified omniscient POV. That means the POV switches between an invisible, impersonal narrator and one character per scene. That's what keeps it from being head-hopping.

Photo by C. Ward
I think I developed this method from being a boomer, i.e, first generation TV watcher. My impersonal narrator is like a video camera. The reader sees what's going on through the camera's lens. Usually it's in a neutral location and can pan and cut between characters. It can zoom into microscopic level and zoom out all the way across the universe. Now and then during a scene, it moves to the POV character, above or beside his head, so the reader sees what that character sees; and when the "camera" is there, the reader can know what the character is thinking and feeling.

Follow this link for an example of a scene told from this dual viewpoint: The Candidate Excerpt. (Use your browser's back button to return here.)

In this scene, the impersonal narrator is the one describing the three men's physical appearance. The narrator shares POV with Randy. We can see what he's thinking (he wants his friends' help and support with his run for Congress). The camera/narrator never tells us what's in Shelby's or John Mark's head. We have to interpret it through their words and actions, as seen by the camera and/or Randy.

As a reader, I find blatant head-hopping as annoying as anyone else, but subtly switching the POV "camera" between the impersonal narrator and one character per scene isn't head-hopping, in my opinion. And it removes what I consider to be an arbitrary and unnecessarily restrictive "rule" that engenders some workarounds and remedies that can be as annoying as the original headhopping.

Being omniscient, the impersonal narrator also knows things the POV character might not know--or knows but might not be thinking of at the moment. The narrator can pass along information that the reader needs in those circumstances. Here's an example of narrator-supplied information, also known as author intrustion (in bolded and italicized text). Purists no doubt hate it, but I've never had a reader even mention it:
When his plate was cleared, Troy checked the lunch bag to see if a small dessert was tucked in there somewhere, but there was nothing. Patty must be planning a high-calorie dessert for supper if she was depriving him at lunch.

His attention was caught by a piece of paper protected in a plastic sandwich bag and he took it out. It was a small, cream-colored envelope, cool to the touch from having been in a compact refrigerator in his office all morning. Inside was one of his wife’s notecards, a pine bough and her first name printed in gold on the front. The cards were blank, for writing personal messages.

This one had no written message, though. When he opened it, a smaller folded paper about the size of a business check fell out and barely missed his plate. He unfolded it, looked at it a few moments, cut his eyes away and stifled a smile.

“What is it?” Max said, bristling with curiosity.

“It’s a gift certificate.”

“She’s kinda jumping the gun on your birthday a little bit, isn’t she? Anniversary, too.”

The Stevensons’ tenth wedding anniversary was coming up at the end of June, and Troy’s thirty-third birthday in early July.

“She wouldn’t give me a gift certificate for either one of those.” He put the certificate and card back in the envelope and slid it into his inside breast pocket. “It’s a no-occasion gift certificate."
From Southern Man by Connie Chastain              

Story-telling isn't mathematics. There isn't a formula that must be followed. It is an art form, and when the rules create a solution worse than the problem, that's when rules can be, and should be, cirumvented.  In my ever so humble opinion

Gettin' serious about blogging

It's about time...

For a while now, I've been studying blogs, particularly the blogs of writers, to see what I needed to do to breathe some life into my blog. I've noticed some interesting things.

First, I note that big-name novelists don't have blogs. Nicholas Sparks doesn't have a blog. Nora Roberts, Vince Flynn, Debbie Macomber, Sherilyn Kenyon -- nary a blog among them. What they do have is websites with frequently updated content. Of course, when you're a big name novelist raking in the royalties, you can pay somebody to keep your website updated.

For lesser known authors, including the unpublished aspiring ones, blogs are more common. What I've noted about these blogs is the frequent ambiguity of who to blog for -- readers or other writers.

When an author blogs about show-don't-tell, POV and headhopping, GMC (goal, motivation, conflict), passive voice... that author is blogging for other writers. These are subjects of great uninterest to readers -- at least, by these designations. What they're interested in is story and characters and sometimes where you get your ideas.

Of course, other writers can also be readers.

That being the case, I've decided to blog for both. For writers on Mondays, for readers on Wednesdays and Miscellaneous on Fridays. Tuesdays and Thursdays may -- may -- find me making short posts such as quotes, interesting comments, tweets, etc.

Due to, um, circumstances (how's that for vagueness?) this new blogging schedule may not fall into place until sometime in February. We'll see.

A new look for the new year

For a while now, I've been aware that my red/black/gray-themed website was not reflective of a romance writer. Probably not surprising when you take into account that it was inspired by the website of a famous action-adventure author... Well, duh.


So I redesigned the sucker.

Perhaps I went a little too far in the other direction? Retro pink, green and gold, like a 1970s Southern wedding theme? Roses and scrolls? Wavy-bottomed header? Ya think?

Ah, well. I'll leave it a while. And if it turns out the new look doesn't resonate with my readers (all ten of you), maybe I'll go back to the red/black/gray theme -- or start all over again with something new? Coral/aqua/cream -- the colors of 1950s melamine dishes? How about the hot pink/teal/plum of the Miami Vice Eighties?

I think I'd rather get back to writing novels. But if you want to sound off on the new look, just click the comment link.

Romance in an RV Park?

Early chapters from my work-in-progress.  Enjoy!

The Whirlwind
by
Connie Chastain

Chapter One
 
He stopped for gas at an interchange fifty miles north of the Florida border. It was late afternoon in mid-August. The brilliant blue sky was clear of summer's perpetual haze but the air was still summer-hot.

The gas pump took his cedit card with no problem and he could have left after filling up, but a twinge of hunger sent him inside for a snack. It was cool and dim inside. Behind the counter, a large woman with china-white skin and curly auburn hair took his money and chattered at him while she rang up his purchase.

"Headed to Flarda? Lotta people who stop here are. Usually on the way to Disney World."

"No. Just roaming." He looked over a swivel rack displaying local and regional publications and brochures for tourist attractions. "Any decent campgrounds close around?"

"Hmm." The clerk thought it over. "Closest one's probably Lake Lucy. Take this road east, don't get back on the interstate. Half a mile it intersects with old Highway 41. Turn right, go south about six miles, then west on state Road 87. You'll see Lake Lucy Road in about two more miles. Lake's small, used mostly by folks that live around here, but it's got nice camping facilities -- RV lots, rental cabins and a real good camp store."

"Thanks." He nodded and settled his gray cowboy hat on his head, went back to the black SUV with Pennsylvania plates and slid behind the wheel.

The hefty red-headed chick was right on with her directions. He found the place with no trouble at all. At the camp store, he paid for a weekend rental. He hadn't even realized it was Friday.

The fatigue he'd lived with going on two years now, and the tension it precipitated, had begun to ebb at some point after leaving Pittsburgh last week. He hadn't noticed it until this moment.

He found the cabin and turned into a parking place paved with gravel and oyster shells. For a moment, he gazed at the structure through the windshield, unaware that a smile tugged at the corners of his mouth.

Cinderblock walls painted shell pink. Jalousie windows. Tar and gravel coating the butterfly roof. Had to date back to the Fifties--back when there was plenty of money and leisure time, not to mention relief and optimism, after a war that had devastated the world.

It reminded him of beach cabins in his grandparents' flickering home movies, which starred his mother and uncle riding bikes, playing in the surf and ... growing up. He shook off the brief dip into nostalgia with a deep breath.

After giving the interior of the cabin a cursory once-over, he took a slow stroll to the water's edge. The lake was long and narrow and the water reflected the breathtaking blue of the sky. On the opposite shore, he saw other vacation cottages shaded with diciduous trees, huge and thick-foliaged, mingled with tall, dark pines. A few people swam near the shore, a couple of small powerboats pulled skiers and, far down the lake, a tiny red and white lateen sail floated just above the surface of the water.

Mellow day, idyllic setting straight out of childhood--

"Hey, mister?" His reverie was interrupted by a childish voice that seemed to fit perfectly with his thoughts. He turned to see a boy perhaps six years old clad in swim trunks and carrying a plastic float mattress. "Did you see a dog come by here?"

"No. But I've only been out here a minute."

"I'm kinda worried he ran off. See, he's afraid of storms and he was acting like he does when a big storm's coming. But I don't even see no clouds."

"Maybe there's weather headed this way. Sometimes animals sense things like that before people can see them."

"Yeah." The boy looked around, concern wrinkling his brow.

"You want me to help you look for him?"

"Would'ja? There ain't nobody else to help me. My uncle went to buy barbecue and it's hard for my mama to walk. She sprained her ankle."

"Is she nearby?"

"Right over there." The boy pointed to a small travel trailer with a colorful striped awning. The camp site was fixed up invitingly with webbed lawn chairs and a checkered table cloth on the picnic table.

"Let's go make sure it's all right with her."

They walked together to the small trailer, the boy chattering easily. "I had to get out of the water when Uncle Kenny left. Mama won't let me swim unless somebody's watchin' me. So I was playin' with Pepper, but then he ran off."

They reached the travel trailer and the boy carelessly tossed the air mattress on the ground, opened the door and stepped inside. "Mama!"

"I'm right here, Julian. It's a little trailer, you don't have to yell."

"Sorry. Mama, is it okay if this man helps me hunt for Pepper? He ran off like a storm's coming."

The boy -- Julian -- backed down the step to the ground as his mother came to stand in the door, favoring her left foot, which had an ace bandage wrapped around the ankle.

"Hi," she said noncommitally to the stranger.

He nodded. "Hi. My name's Daniel. I just got here for the weekend when your son came by my cabin looking for his dog. I'll be glad to help him hunt for Pepper, if it's all right with you."

"Oh, I don't think y'all need to go to that trouble. Pepper'll be back before you know it."

"Mama!" Julian exclaimed softly. "He's prob'ly scared. We hafta find him!"

The woman looked down at her son and back to the stranger and her eyes narrowed. "Could you tell me your name again, please?"

"Daniel."

"Oh, my goodness." She put a hand to her cheek as recognition dawned. "You're Dan Rawson. Steelers quarterback!"

Dan took off his hat, stepped forward and extended a hand. "Former quarterback," he corrected with a polite smile.

The woman scrunched her shoulders with an answering smile and said softly, "Wow." She returned his firm handshake. "A celebrity right here at Lake Lucy Campground! I'm Cassie Shipley. And of course you've met Julian."

At that moment they heard nervous yipping behind them growing stronger, and Dan glanced behind him as Julian yelled jubilantly, "Pepper!"

The brindled mutt trotted toward his young master, tongue and ears flapping.

"Hey, boy! Where'd you get off to?" Julian leaned over to give Pepper's back a scratch. "C'mere, let's put you on the chain." He tethered the dog to a lightweight chain staked to the ground near the picnic table.

His dog's wellbeing out of the way, Julian trained his gaze on Dan. "Are you really a professional quarterback?"

"I used to be; I'm retired now."

"Wow. Hey, would you like to eat with us? Uncle Kenny's bringing barbecue from the best place in town. He always buys more than we can eat."

"Well, thanks, but I don't want to intrude."

Cassie looked at Dan, half embarrassed. "Oh, it's no intrusion. He just doesn't think sometimes, that you might have family or someone with you. Of course, they'd be welcome, too."

"No. I'm traveling alone. And I have to tell you, barbecue sounds real good."

"Well, it settled, then. It's too hot to eat out here, so I've put everything on the dinette table inside--there's cole slaw, potato salad, Texas toast.... We have soft drinks and iced tea and Kenny's got a few longnecks in the fridge. All we're waiting for is the barbecue."

"I think my stomach just growled," Daniel said, a smile lighting his face. "Had a snack before I got here but I guess I'm hungrier than I thought."

"It should be here in a few minutes." Cassie gingerly stepped to the ground and nodded at the lawn chairs. "Might as well sit while we wait."

They settled into comfortable webbed chairs and Julian sat the end of the picnic table bench, swinging his legs. "You reckon Uncle Kenny will bring Lindy back with him?"

"I didn't hear him say, but you'd like that, wouldn't you?" Firming her lips to control a smile, she explained to the visitor, "He's got a crush on his uncle's girlfriend."

"I do not!" Julian protested. "She's just fun, for a girl."

He glanced to the side and saw Pepper straining to get to the trailer door, trembling and whimpering. The chain stopped him about a foot short of his goal. Julian ducked his head to see as much of the sky as possible beyond the awning. Still cloudless. The sun, dropping lower in the sky across the lake, cast long, sharp shadows on the ground.

"Why's he actin' like that?" the boy asked his mother. "There ain't no rain around."

"Let's see," Dan said, pulling his cell phone from his shirt pocket. He pressed a few keys and grunted. "Look," he said, turning the instrument toward Julian. The tiny display showed a map of south Georgia and north Florida in brilliant green. Blobs of red and yellow overlaid it. "Front coming in, to the west of us. Maybe that's what he's sensing."

"Poor puppy," Cassie said, sympathy on her face as she looked at the dog. "Put him in the trailer, Julian." She glanced at Dan. "He likes to ride out storms in his dog bed with his toys all around him."

Julian put Pepper in the trailer and made it back to his seat just as a car crunched into the campsite's parking area.

"Yay!" the boy said, jumping up. "Barbecue!"

The adults stood and turned to see a young man emerge from a late model compact carrying a large white paper bag. As he approached, Cassie said, "Ken, we have a celebrity guest for supper. Dan Rawson, my brother, Ken Shipley."

"Well, well," Ken said, extending a hand for a shake, a smile splitting his face. "Honored to meet you. What brings you to these parts?"

"Just visiting family here and there, doing a little traveling."

"That's nice. You got family around here?"

"Kenny!" Cassie exclaimed, and then shot Dan an apologetic look.

Kenny grinned. "Sorry. Didn't mean to pry, but peggin' a newcomer's kinfolks is a Southern thang. We can't help it."

"Oh, I know," Dan said with a chuckle. "I grew up in North Carolina. Most of my kin are up there. The rest, scattered all over."

Kenny stepped to the trailer door and pushed it open for the others.

"It's pretty small in there so you fellows go on in and sit down," Cassie said. "I'll fix drinks. What does everybody want?"

"Co-cola," said Julian, bouncing inside with the energy only children have.

"Go ahead," Kenny said to Dave. "You, too, sis. You're supposed to stay off that ankle another coupla days. I'll do the drinks."

Dan removed his hat and slid into the booth as Cassie took a seat across from him.

"Julian," she said, "Put Mr. Rawson's hat on the shelf over there."

While Ken busied himself in the small kitchen, Dan handed Julian his hat and glanced around the interior of the trailer. It looked showroom new and personalized with books, magazine, CDs and framed photos on the walls, but not cluttered. He looked at his hostess.

"This is nice. Roomier than it looks from the outside."

"Kenny and I bought it last summer, mainly for Julian. We thought about buying a cabin out here, but they're really expensive and we can take this to the beach, the mountains... wherever. We've really enjoyed it."

"I like it," Julian told his guest. He perched on the end of the bench next to Dan and said, "Can I sit here?"

"Absolutely," Dan said, giving the boy a wink.

It took Kenny only a few minutes to bring drinks and a platter filled with a variety of barbecued meat to the table. He slid into the booth next to his sister, nodded to Julian and said, "Want to say the blessing, hotrod?"

"'kay." Julian laced his fingers in front of his chin and said, "For food and friends and happy times, for families together, for sun and rain, for woods and plain, we thank Thee, O Our Father. Amen."

"Amen," Kenny echoed. "Everybody dig in."

* * *

Cleanup was quick and easy, since there was little food left to put away and plates, cups and flatwere were throwaways. Julian went to the small bedroom to check on Pepper while the adults, sated and mellowed out, headed outdoors.

They stepped into a moderate wind that ruffled their hair and made the awning flap. The air had grown much cooler while they were at supper.

"Goodness!" Cassie exclaimed as a sudden gust blew Julian's air mattress past them. Kenny grabbed it before it got away. Another gust billowed the red checkered tablecloth half off the picnic table, and threatened to toss the lightweight aluminum chairs on their sides. Cassie grabbed the tablecloth while the men folded the chairs and slid them under the trailer.

The front Dan had showed Julian on his phone screen was almost upon them. Kenny looked westward across the lake and uttered a low whistle. "We're in for it."

The others followed his gaze to the roiling bank of greenish gray clouds above the treeline and approaching with frightening speed. As they watched, a finger of gray slowly formed and snaked downward as if to poke the trees below.

Kenny streaked back to the travel trailer door, tossed the air mattress inside and yelled, "Jules! Bring Pepper and get out here, now! Hurry!" The three adults looked at each other, alarm growing on their faces, and Kenny muttered, "We gotta get outta here."

"No time," Dan said. "Don't want to be in a vehicle, anyway. Let's go to my cabin. It's concrete block, just a few yards away."

"Arright," Kenny said as Julian stepped outside clutching a quaking Pepper in his arms. Kenny grabbed them up and said, "Tornado."

They struck out along the lake front. Cassie's limp slowed her and Dan held out his arm to her. "Grab hold and speed up if you can."

Rain and pea-sized hail, sudden and hard, pelted them as they ran past a couple of empty campsites and a row of shrubs that separated the RV section from the cabin area.

Kenny heard the roaring of the tornado behind them grow alarmingly loud and feared the gusting wind would sweep them off their feet before they made it to the cabin. But in moments, he saw Dan standing beside the open door, ushering Cassie inside. Kenny followed, set Julian on the floor and said, "Bathroom's probably the safest place. Y'all get in there, huddle together. I'll bring the mattress to put over us.

Dan and Cassie did as he told them, hunkered in the bathtub with Julian and Pepper between them. Kenny drug the mattress off the bed and wrestled it into the tiny bath. He sat on the floor beside the tub and they pulled the mattress over their heads, held it there, and waited.

The wind grew wilder, louder around the cabin and they heard a roaring pass over the house along with the faint tinkling of breaking glass. Pepper wailed softly and Julian trembled.

"It's okay, sweetheart. It'll be over in a minute. Everything'll be all right," Cassie soothed, although her voice quivered with fright.

Kenny muttered, "Bet the trailer's a goner."

They waited a few moments, listening to the roaring grow distant and the wind gradually die. After a good five minutes of silence, Kenny crawled out from under the mattress and pulled it out of the bathroom. Dan unfolded himself and helped Cassie and Julian out of their shadowed, pink-tiled haven.

They stepped into the main room of the cabin to find the front door open and Kenny disappearing through the doorway.

"Stay here," Dan said, following Kenny outside. Cassie and Julian, still clutching the dog, waited anxiously, in silence. In a few minutes, Dan reappeared. "Trailer made it through. Got knocked off it's jacks, sitting crooked in the campsite but seems okay. Awning is shredded. Picnic table upended. Looks like the twister didn't touch down until it passed us."

"Oh, thank goodness!" Cassie said. "Nothing but woods and swamp for miles to the east."

They walked out into the wet, dusky evening. The chaos of minutes before had settled down to a soft rain. They found Kenny disconnecting the propane tanks at the front of the trailer.

"Don't want to take any chances of a leak in the lines anywhere. We'll have to head back to town for tonight, at least." Around them, other campers were inspecting their trailers and RVs for damage.

"Best I can tell," he continued, "most of the damage is tree limbs down. Still got power," he said, pointing toward the cabins on the opposite shore where lights glimmered through the rain. He looked toward their visitor. "Let me finish here and I'll come down, help clean up your cabin."

"Nothing to do except put the mattress back on the bed. I think I can manage that," Dan said with a grin.

"You got a broken window, too. I'll stop at the camp store and report it on the way out."

"Thanks. So you folks live close by?"

"Yeah, in Verona. About eight miles to the west of us. I'll be out here tomorrow, try to get everything fixed so these two can come back out a few more days. Last fling before school starts."

"I'll be in the first grade," Julian said proudly, still clutching Pepper. The dog's trembling had toned down considerbly.

"That's a milestone in a man's life," Dan said with a wink. He shook hands with Cassie and Kenny. "I enjoyed meeting and visiting with you folks. Thanks again for supper." He glanced around the campsite. "Let me know if you need help with this. I'll be here through the weekend."

Chapter Two

Around eight, a teenager from the camp store stopped by Dan's cabin and taped plastic over the broken window. It was above the sink in the pullman kitchen and the rain had done no damage inside.

"Just one jalousie broken," he reported to Dan. "Should be able to replace that for you tomorrow."

"That's fine," Dan said. When the job was done and the kid departed, he toed his shoes off and shucked his still damp jeans and shirt. Sprawled on the sofa, he found the remote control on an end table and turned on the television, wondering if cable might have been interrupted by the storm.

Apparently not. A hundred and two channels in all their inanity were available. He flipped past the sports channels -- he did not want to even think about that right now -- and finally settled on a mindless war movie with lots of violence, explosions, death and dying. After a few moments of that, he turned off the TV and laid his head against the backrest. He opened himself up to register the unfamiliarity around him.

Thoughts of his hosts earlier in the evening came to him, and he began to wonder about things he hadn't paid much attention to at the time. Kenny and his sister and nephew all had the same last name, Shipley. There had been no mention of a husband and father, and he grew mildly curious.

Julian was a cute kid; brown as a berry, probably from playing outdoors all summer. The sun had streaked and tipped his dark hair a shade or two lighter. Dan had not been around children much in his life, and he found them somewhat intimidating, but Julian was as likeable as he was cute.

And his mother....a pretty woman, slender but shapely in a pastel shorts set. She had pulled her shoulder length dark hair off her neck with one of those big, toothed clamps that looked like an instrument of torture; but it had come loose as she hobbled through the wind and rain to his cabin ... clutching his arm....

She had been so scared ... and so brave, as she cuddled Julian and Pepper and murmured comforting words to them at the height of the storm. Her voice, and laugh, were a touch husky, he'd noticed at supper. And the way the rain had plastered her clothes--

No. Huh-uh. Forget it. Two days, you're outta here. So forget it.

* * *

"You want me to leave the nightlight on, sweetheart?" Cassie sat on the edge of the bed in Julian's room, with its cowboy-Jaguars-Braves-outer space decor.

With Pepper curled at his side and sleeping soundly, her son lay back against the plaid-cased pillow and shook his head. "I ain't scared."

"Okay." She leaned forward to kiss his forehead and accepted his kiss on her cheek. "'Night, my brave little man."

"'Night, Mama."

Cassie stepped softly down the hall to her bedroom and slipped out of her terry bathrobe. By now only slightly damp from her shower, she pulled on cool, cotton knit sleep wear.

Julian might not need a night light but she did. Her nerves were still jangled by their close encounter with the tornado and her mind kept going back to the chaos-- the windwhipped rain, the pelting hailstones, the roaring of the twister as it passed over head while they huddled in the bathtub in Dan Rawson's rental cabin.

Dan Rawson. Professional football player ... rich, famous, good-looking. But so down-to-earth. Weren't pro athletes supposed to have gargantuan egos? Weren't they supposed to be self-centered hedonists with a glitzy, big-busted woman on each arm?

But Dan had been cordial and respectful at supper. Now that she thought back--the first chance she'd had to think about supper since the'd stepped outside into the storm--she realized there had been very little football talk. Kenny had certainly asked enough fan-type questions and Dan had given interesting or funny replies, but several times he had managed to smoothly change the subject, usually with a question of his own.

The three adults had talked more about Kenny's landscaping and decorative concrete company than Dan. He was a great listener. She remembered attentiveness on his face, the the smiles that would come and go, the occasional laugh--and what a marvelous laugh!

Several times, she'd caught herself staring at him, and she'd had to force herself to look away. Once or twice, their knees had bumped under the table. He hadn't seemed to notice but she had -- felt a mingling of mild embarrassment with mild...titillation....

Didn't mean anything. It was just because there was a handsome celebrity unexpectedly gracing their table. He had the cabin for the weekend only. He'd leave after that, and they'd never see him again. He would become nothing more than an anecdote to tell her friends and customers at the beauty shop.


This is a work in progress and may differ when completed and edited
Copyright © 2010 by Connie Chastain 


 
 

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Southern Man, of course, is completed and available on Amazon.com.  The others are all in progress. Sweet Southern Boys is about 75% complete. Little Sister is about 1/3 complete, and The Candidate (working title; it will be changed) is just getting started.

I am writing them as one undertaking for the sake of continuity. Fourtunately, nothing in Southern Man is impacting the sequels (thus far), perhaps because the first two were begun as prequels to the third. 

Yes, my original project was Little Sister. In the writing of Ainsley Kincaid's story, big brother Shelby and his two best buddies, Randy Stevenson and John Mark Jordan, wanted their story told.  So, I temporarily shelved LS to work on SSB. And, as it was reaching completion, I couldn't ignore the story of Randy's father taking shape in my mind.  So, I stopped SSB to write Southern Man.

The Candidate didn't exist even as an idea during that process. It's a very late addition, but I'm enthusiastic about it -- see the excerpt at the end of this post.  So now I'm writing all these stories in tandem.

Isn't it funny how this prequel/sequel thing works?



The Candidate

Chapter One
"My friend," said Shelby Kincaid as he poured a mug of steaming coffee. "I don't know whether your testicles just got real big or your brain got real small."

He carried his cup across the break room, set it down on a table and took a chair. Beneath unruly blond hair, his blue-gray eyes fastened on the man seated across from him.

Randy Stevenson's dark eyes returned Shelby's gaze. His sensitive, enigmatic face, surrounded with shaggy black hair, betrayed not a hint of mirth. "Dickson's more than a tax-and-spend liberal. He's a leftist, a socialist. Somebody's got to challenge him."

"Not you." Shelby took a careful slurp of coffee. "His political machine will tear you to pieces. And the public at large will help 'em."

Randy shrugged. "I got real thick skin."

"No, what you've got is crap for brains. Now, listen. You're one of the Verona Three. They'll dig up everything they can about that--about your daddy, too, just to smear you by association. You've seen how politics works--the whole story doesn't come out until after the damage is done. You're also a Southern Baptist. That makes you a sexist, a racist and a homophobe."

Shelby went completely still as realization flitted into his eyes, followed by alarm. "And it's horrifying, what they'd do to Susan and the kids. Have you thought about that?"

The back door opened, briefly letting in the sound of morning traffic. John Mark Jordan stepped inside and traded greetings with the other two as he got coffee for himself and brought it to the table, his netbook under his arm. With his remarkably handsome face and stylish apparel, he was often mistaken for a client of a nearby modeling agency.

"What's going on?" The question was rhetorical because he didn't wait for an answer before opening the netbook to skim the business section of the Jacksonville Post Herald.

Shelby aimed a thumb across the table. "Brilliant here says he's thinking of running for Congress."

John Mark's head snapped up. His brown eyes, wide with astonishment, fastened on Randy. "Have you gone crazy?"

Randy lifted his chin. "How many times have we sat at this table handwringin' about the future our children will have to live in? How many times have we said something has to be done? Well, I'm gonna do something. I don't know if it'll help, whether it'll be too little too late--but I have to try."

John Mark remained incredulous, his netbook forgotten. "You'll get slaughtered. There's a bazillion things they'll attack you for. Without mercy."

"Don't try to tell him anything," Shelby muttered. "I've already tried. He says his skin's thick."

Randy raked a thumbnail across his lips and considered the other two. Their opinions and advice were crucial to him. They were not only his business partners; they were also his best friends, going back to grade school. For over two decades, the three of them had been closer than brothers.

"I know what's in my life better than they do. Whatever they attack me with, I'll have a carefully crafted defense or a counter-attack prepared well in advance. I've already started that. The message will go out on a dynamite website, press releases and online videos so powerful they'll go viral. The three of us could pull it off. Turn it all to my advantage. I know we could."

Silence filled the room as his friends stared at him, the import of his words sinking in.

John Mark murmured, "How does Susan feel about this?"

"Totally supportive. We've talked about it a lot, imagined worst-case scenarios, up to and including violence against us, although we aren't paranoid enough to assume it would come to that. She has realistic expectations and she's looking forward to the challenge. But her main concern is the kids and the kind of world they'll have to live in if the country doesn't change where it's headed."

The men's expressions grew pensive. They'd discussed numerous times the grim world that awaited their children--all children--in the foreseeable future. Now they were looking at an opportunity to do something about it on a national scale--or, at least, to try--and it was both sobering and exhilarating.

Randy gave his companions an appraising look. Their demeanor had gradually changed as he spoke, and he could see their resistance weakening.

"You realize that both of you will be drug through the mud, too, especially if you help with the campaign. And you have your own families to think of."

John Mark grunted. "Are you kidding? You do this, Ainsley'll be your biggest cheerleader."

Randy's eyes crinkled in an almost smile, but only for a moment. He wanted all considerations out in the open. "One other thing. A political campaign will take us away from the company for months."

"That's not an insurmountable problem." Shelby pushed his mug aside and leaned back. "We can take care of it."

Another silence fell. This time, an undercurrent of excitement vibrated through the air.

"I'm driving down to Saint Augustine after work to talk to Missy and Tommy," Randy said. "Saturday, I'll take the family to Verona to discuss it with Mama and Daddy. If nobody can give me a powerfully good reason for not doing it, I'll register my candidacy within the month."

 He looked at each of his friends for a couple of seconds. "I want you two with me in this."

John Mark gave his earlobe a tug. "Well, you know we can't let you do this by yourself, so you've got us."

Shelby nodded. "Unless we can talk you out of it."

Mirth finally sparked in Randy's eyes. "You got three weeks."

Exponential Nostalgia

Thanks to my sis for that great phrase.  She and I are hip-deep in a vintage music craze at YouTube. It started with TV theme songs from the Sixties (Route 66, Mr. Lucky, Peter Gunn, etc.) and grew from there.  I now have five playlists at YouTube where I can go and listen to my faves in various categories -- Mid Century Swank Instrumentals; Mid Century Country; Rock From Back In the Day; Mid Century Vocals and Eighties Goodies.

One of the songs I found was a popular tune from the late 1950s, The Wayward Wind by Gogi Grant. I really liked that song, though I was a grade schooler when it was popular. We had a 45 RPM version (and it's probably still around my house somewhere). I can't play my old vinyl singles and albums, as we have no working phonograph anymore. How wonderful to find it on YouTube!

If you want to hear it, click this link: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SFhwxZeq6g4  What a voice! What a classy song!  But here's the topper.  Grant performed this song in 2004 when she was approaching eighty years old -- and was still performing in 2010 in Palm Springs, California.  Enjoy the 2004 performance:




Fantastic!

Quotable qotes from my characters

“She was trying to be helpful. That’s what women do, because that’s how God made them—to be helpers and companions to men. Mainly wives to husbands but you find it in the workplace, too.... They want to help us and they want to please us, and so they go overboard sometimes. But you don’t have to get bowed up about it.”
~Troy Stevenson, discussing his secretary, Dinah Langley,
with his friend and colleague, Max Ingram

“I know it hurts you to think there are people out there who believe you did what you’re accused of. But they’re the people who hate you, anyway, because you have a family you love and take care of. They’re the people who want me to support myself, they want the government to raise the children, and they want you to disappear. Don’t give their opinions any weight, not any, for one second longer.”
~Patty Stevenson, to her husband, Troy

"We were both saps....S-A-P. Southern American Princess. In our case, small-town, small-time version....Ornaments. Frivolous. Not to be taken seriously. I don't think my parents realized what kind of self-image they were helping us develop, because they told us from time to time how important it was to get an education and think about the kind of work we wanted to do, but that was stacked up against years of silly ballet lessons and parties and school clubs and cheerleading and prom queening..."
~Briana Farrior to her employer and love interest, Justin Adair

"I'm a little put out with you right now, but I'll get over it. Anger's a feeling; feelings come and go. But love is constant and steadfast, and the capacity to forgive is limitless."
~Justin Adair, to his secetary and love interest, Briana Farrior
 
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